The Relics of Three Religions and Nine Streams——Comment on 'Phoenix Mask'
Reading "Phoenix Mask" for the first time is like walking into a colorful temple fair during the Republic of China. The monks and Taoists advocated for excellence and sang and chanted to win. The new ideas that broke through the barriers and the old and conservative rules collided fiercely.
The prosperity and mystery of Xiangxi are intricate and complex. Young people who follow the black and white paths freely walk in the gaps between various forces. It is like a bustling world.
"First-grade Golden Buddha, second-grade Taoism, third-grade blue stone, fourth-grade Honghuo, fifth-grade Qingyang, sixth-grade Meiyuan, seventh-grade Zhumen, and eighth-grade Orchid." The setting of the sect is eye-catching, and the traditional Jianghu style
The sect is integrated into the professional view of online games, the regional barriers are broken, and the flat points are reorganized into vertical surfaces. The protagonist travels through the latitude and longitude of history and reality with memories and longings. The two sects of Buddhism and Taoism have a long history, but in today's society
Under the trend of the times, they had to change from the secular world and walk a difficult path between rebuilding the golden body and promoting the righteous Dharma. One of the orchids in Honghuo Meiyuan were taken from trains and ships, one from pear gardens, and one came from advocating excellence. They were originally the lowest power during the Republic of China.
But it has regained its vitality in modern society, and even the orchid has transformed into an orchid that is envied by men in Shanghai bars at night; the blue stone is the middle power of balance and the mysterious clue sect, threading threads among the eight sects, faintly revealing the favor of the past.
Hatred... The ebb and flow of the beach in Shanghai, the rise of black and white, all believe in power, but no one can ignore the reality of society's drunkenness and wealth. Everyone is jumping into the water one after another. Only those who are most proficient in this way can become the new king of the world.
As a result, the protagonist Zhu Tong appeared in a suit and leather shoes with lingering grassroots pride.
Zhu Tong's profession is a liar. He was born in the seventh-grade Zhu Clan, a professional swindler's sect that is mixed with stories of gods and ghosts. He has no family and no foundation. His master has seen through the world but cannot escape from it. The white sand is in nirvana, and it is black with it. Zhu Tong
Zhu Tong's training greatly developed his talent, but it also allowed him to indulge his inner violence and wildness. He seemed to be able to navigate the world with ease, but in fact he lacked real control. He often jumped out of disguise when he was extreme, and often broke the rules when he was willful.
A liar should completely insert himself into the role he wants to play, but the "little liar" in Zhu Tong's heart always rears his head at critical moments.
Writing about a low-level person who is like a fish in the upper class society is a common writing method for many writers. On the one hand, they satisfy their inner desire for command and control, and on the other hand, they despise and cast aside the dark world that they don’t like. However, it is also a common mistake for writers to lack writing skills and become YY.
In the final analysis, his mistakes are not familiar enough with the world he is targeting. In "Phoenix Mask", there are more or less similar problems. The reality of character creation comes from the reality of the scenes where the characters move. Readers can easily read "Phoenix Mask" in "Phoenix Mask"
"Shanghai" shows the author's anger towards materialism and collusion between government and businessmen, but this anger comes from the straightforward words rather than the plot. The bar white-collar workers and shopping mall tycoons in the plot all have cartoon-like thinness, financial fraud, and blackmail.
Blackmail also has a street spirit that cannot be shaken off. It is obvious that the author is not familiar with certain circles, or at least has not done enough work. The imaginary pale opponent bows down in front of the protagonist and is so angry that it will only affect the protagonist's "forsightedness".
"It also became childish and ridiculous.
At this point, it can be roughly concluded that the description of the world in "Phoenix Mask" is far better than the description of the shopping mall, and the description of men is far better than the description of women.
Human nature is complex, and both men and women are the same. Truly outstanding great authors can write from human nature, break their own gender barriers, and create characters that belong to the public. However, there is no doubt that in current online literature, this is a common problem among male and female writers.
's weakness.
There are many women in "Phoenix Mask", but all of them are pale and plain, without flesh and blood. There are four women who have intersections with the male protagonist: the vicious Qingmei, the innocent Qin Miao, the innocent Ye'er, and the infatuated Yu Lan
, they are all women who simply cannot tolerate secondary personality traits. Ye'er's miraculous beauty and miraculous naivety make her have all the natural beauty that a vase should have, which is fine; but with Yu Lan's IQ and EQ, she actually
Being able to become the general manager of a group company has to make people lament that the market is shallow and there are no heroes. Men express their masculine charm by conquering many outstanding women. Although it cannot be said to be natural, at least it has happened since ancient times. There is nothing wrong with writing about it.
, but if the image of women is unreal, and the process of throwing themselves into someone's arms is too bizarre, then... we can only comment helplessly: the ideal is bright, the reality is dark, and the road to lusting after beautiful women is long and long.
twists and turns...
Returning to the theme of "Phoenix Mask", the author named Phoenix, which should have two meanings: 1. The climax of the story (so far updated) takes place in Phoenix, the mysterious ink town in western Hunan; 2. It plays a hidden role
The main prop is the phoenix mask, and the Zhumen originated from Xiangxi at the same time. The historical origins and subsequent stories are about to emerge. Xiangxi, Miao girls, poison, ghosts and gods... Various mysterious elements have been used in fantasy novels thousands of times, and
The author tried to write in a plain style to be more realistic, to achieve a fascinating effect that is both real and illusory. But objectively speaking, the author's grasp of the small town of Phoenix is quite real, but the writing method of Miao girls and Gu Shu is just imaginary.
Daring to love and daring to hate does not mean that love is hysterical, and hot and straightforward feelings cannot be at the expense of weakening the IQ of the Miao people. Duohua and his mother Die Die's rock-and-roll youth-like appearance and the word "mysterious" really don't count.
The spectrum is neither the self-contained style described by Shen Congwen, nor the blend of business and history in today's Xiangxi. Instead, the business spirit of Brother Zhu Tong appears much more real.
In summary, the structure of "Phoenix Mask" is pleasing, the storyline is quite attractive, and the author's writing consciousness and critical reflection on society are even more valuable. However, the unrealistic details and the paleness of the characters obviously weaken the power of the theme.
Of course, the author has declared: "First of all, this book does not have any concept of the era, illusory country, illusory background, and must not be compared, compared, or connected; secondly, all characters, backgrounds, and settings are the needs of the work and are reasonable and consistent.
It doesn't matter whether it is." But I prefer to believe that this is an announcement to avoid unnecessary arguments. After all, characters, background, and settings are all important elements that determine the success of a novel. Once the pen touches the truth, there is no way to avoid the truth, otherwise
, it is better to be empty.
My husband, the phoenix, burned himself in a sacred tree, and then became nirvana in the world. I hope Mr. Mushroom will try his best to avoid some of the common shortcomings of online fantasy novels. I sincerely hope that an excellent work will be born as soon as possible. The comments are just one family's opinion. If you don't understand, it is biased and inappropriate.
, I hope you can understand me.
(Ah Entropy is a powerful female author, here comes the mushroom to leave a souvenir)